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Akhtar Shahjahanpuri ka sheri Majmooa “Saeban” (Post – 5)

27 Jan

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Posted by on January 27, 2013 in Saeban

 

One response to “Akhtar Shahjahanpuri ka sheri Majmooa “Saeban” (Post – 5)

  1. shakilakhtar

    January 28, 2013 at 10:36 am

    Saleem bhai Allah aap kokhush rakhe.
    Each sher of each ghazal is very good. Adaayegi aur khayaal ki nazakatoN se bhaarpoor.
    lekin ek sher ne zara sa rukne par majboor kiya- jaisa ke meri aadat hai ” sar jaye ya rahe na rahen par kahe beghair” to woh sher yeh hai:
    tum ameer e shaar se milte to ho
    phir bhi kuchh fasla rakha karo.
    Try replacing ‘kuchh’ with ‘thoda’ etc….

    The best sher of all these wonderful ashaars, if one must say, will have to be:
    koi Akhtar ye Maseeha se kahe
    dard pahle se fazoon hai mera.

    Ghalib ka “Ibn e Mariam hua kare koi..” yad aa gaya;
    ek aur sher hai jis ne Meer ki yaad dila di,: Sare aalam pe main hoon chhaya hua……

     

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